some foamwork critique/redlines?

i'm having trouble with a mask i'm working on. i've gotten as far as i can and, even though i know there must be problems with this, i'm unsure what to do next.
some critiques/redlines(preferred) would be awesome



thank you in advance! (i will try and reply to all the comments but i get rather anxious when doing so, but i'll read each one and i appreciate everyone's input!!)